fourteen years

30 Aug


6 Responses to “fourteen years”

  1. N Michael Hawe August 30, 2011 at 4:46 pm #

    Awwwwwwwww! Also: nice haiku. Great job using the title as a direct spring board for the poem.

    • muzzleflashing August 30, 2011 at 6:34 pm #

      Thanks! Yeah – I’m liking the whole “using the title as part of the first line” technique; I like the idea the title standing on its own and the way it can flow into the first line. I appreciate your comment! =)

      • francesca quantamateo September 6, 2011 at 7:25 pm #

        I am troubled by how the groom seems to look vapid and constipated while the bride looks surreptitiously in a different direction. I’m sure they mean well.

      • muzzleflashing September 6, 2011 at 7:27 pm #

        They do mean well! You can’t tell everything from facial expressions. =) (Smiley face. Get it?)

  2. Nefarious X September 13, 2011 at 1:17 am #

    this is touching.

    I had to stop for a second to realize the
    title is included. I won’t call the Haiku police if you don’t 😉

    • muzzleflashing September 13, 2011 at 5:09 am #

      I appreciate you not calling the police – there’s certainly no reason to get them involved… =)

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